Feedback+on+Student+Essay

=FEEDBACK ON "WHAT IS A STUDENT?" ESSAY=

b. 5-PARAGRAPH ESSAYS ARE FOR TESTS. NO PLACE ELSE.
===It's time to move away from the tedious, predictable, formulaic 5-paragraph essays you learned in previous years. Those were just to teach you how to organize your thoughts. Now let it go and write more naturally, letting the ideas create your format.===

"In conclusion, a student is someone who studies hard, pays attention, and gets good grades."
===Don't repeat things to me as if I've already forgotten what I just read. If you can't think of a clever or profound thought to leave your reader with at the end, don't write a separate conclusion. Just tack on a "final-sounding" sentence at the end of your last body paragraph.===