Comments+on+The+Mayor+passages

== TIE EACH DETAIL TO YOUR CLAIM: This is the critical thinking part of the writing, and the most difficult, but we expect all sophomores to be able to do it. Turn on your brains and THINK about how the author has created this character. The character doesn't exist in real life. The author created him. WHY???? What point is the author making about the way this human being thinks and behaves?==

== 2.) Another problem with your passages: No LEAD-INS for quotes. This is called quote plopping. YOU MUST INTRODUCE EACH QUOTE by stating whose words they are and what the quote will show me about the passage, and then FOLLOW UP each quote with your explanation of what it shows about the character.==

Here is what you needed to write:
== Since the Mayor arrived seven years ago, the locals have disliked him. One of the reasons is because of his arbitrary rules, including his "mania for raising taxes for no apparent reason." Clearly the Mayor is abusing his power and collecting money illegally from the villagers. ==

Here is another example from a student paper that is a little better but still needing a clearer contextual lead-in and follow-up:
== The Mayor used to live with a native woman and would strike her because he believed she was trying to cast spells on him. People thought she was going to kill him. "Everyone was waiting for her to murder him. They even laid bets on it." ==

Here is what you needed to write:
== The Mayor used to live with a native woman and would strike her because he believed she was trying to cast spells on him, which shows how paranoid he is of the native people. The villagers believed the woman would eventually murder him, and "even laid bets on it." Their certainty of the woman's power, and their willingness to make sport of it, show their disdain for the Mayor. ==